| Thanks for reading the story, Michael! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Alas, this is not my "preferred" version of the story. After I initially submitted it, I didn't hear back from WWO for months. In the meantime I made minor changes to a couple key scenes, to instill a little more dramatic action (and also to flesh out the character of the daughter a bit more). The climactic scene, as it appears, has happened offstage; we only see the aftermath. In my rewrite, it transpires in full view of the protagonist--more tension and suspense. When I got a note out of the blue from WWO that they were going to run it, I sent them the revised version, and was told that it would be the one they used. But the first version was the one that went up.
I'm still proud of the story as it is, but I'm irked to know that it contains some flaws and that there is a better version.
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