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|  Jay Stevol Neophyte

       Date Joined May 2005 Total Posts : 154 | Posted 10/6/2005 4:26 PM (GMT -4) |   | Blood Meridian, Nathan Meyer
This is the only story I've yet found time to read of the new issue, being somewhat taken up with my own swashbuckler (hopefully to appear in a future issue of FS...). But boy, what a cracker it was!
This was a real gutsy slice of pulp cut from the Howard mold, relentlessly exciting and savage, a great story well-told, and a kickass protagonist. The writing was clear, economical and evocative, throbbing with a macho vitality I rarely see nowadays. The fights were realistic and brilliantly portrayed. Sabbath is a character I want to see more of.
I can't resist a good swashbuckling yarn, and this had it all. Pirates, coutesans, evil plantation owners, flintlocks, swordfights, blood, guts, and even a kinky whipping scene!
My nitpicks, and they are minor:
The Clancy-esque descriptions of the guns got in the way at times, and there was one historical inaccuracy I spotted regarding cordite - cordite wasn't invented until the late 19th century - but I doubt this would be a problem for the average reader (I only knew about it due to my own ressearch for my piece).
That's it. This was a really great piece Nathan, and I wait with baited breath for your next story.
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 |  PaulMc Adept

       Date Joined May 2005 Total Posts : 989 | Posted 10/6/2005 6:19 PM (GMT -4) |   | quote: Originally posted by Jay Stevol
Blood Meridian, Nathan Meyer
This is the only story I've yet found time to read of the new issue, being somewhat taken up with my own swashbuckler (hopefully to appear in a future issue of FS...). But boy, what a cracker it was!
This was a real gutsy slice of pulp cut from the Howard mold, relentlessly exciting and savage, a great story well-told, and a kickass protagonist. The writing was clear, economical and evocative, throbbing with a macho vitality I rarely see nowadays. The fights were realistic and brilliantly portrayed. Sabbath is a character I want to see more of.
I can't resist a good swashbuckling yarn, and this had it all. Pirates, coutesans, evil plantation owners, flintlocks, swordfights, blood, guts, and even a kinky whipping scene!
My nitpicks, and they are minor:
The Clancy-esque descriptions of the guns got in the way at times, and there was one historical inaccuracy I spotted regarding cordite - cordite wasn't invented until the late 19th century - but I doubt this would be a problem for the average reader (I only knew about it due to my own ressearch for my piece).
That's it. This was a really great piece Nathan, and I wait with baited breath for your next story.
What he said. I really did enjoy it, but I tripped over the details of the weapons. It just seemed to break the pace. I didn't even mind the varied descriptions, actually - just when you started talking caliber, it felt like it was digging down one level too deep.
And that's just my opinion and it's worth about as much as it's written on. [;)]
Aside from that though, it was bloody good bloody fun! [:D]
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 |  Red Viper Acolyte
        Date Joined Mar 2005 Total Posts : 439 | Posted 10/6/2005 9:38 PM (GMT -4) |   | I think more pirate stories from Meyer would be a good thing ...
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 |  PaulMc Adept

       Date Joined May 2005 Total Posts : 989 | Posted 10/7/2005 7:27 AM (GMT -4) |   | quote: Originally posted by nathan meyer On calibers. That's a tough one. I hear what you guys are saying. In fact you can thank Howard and Steve for reducing about 20-25% of that out of the original. I will cut down on that if it proves distracting.
I wrote them for the same reason Clancy and Micheal Crichton explain on all their tech details so close--I personally like knowing that stuff. I might be in the minority over all however on that preference so I will cut it down even more to apeal to a broader base.
I was the kind of geek who in the army used to read my weapons manuals just for fun. I'll try and reign it in.
Hey - first of all - I hate harping on the little stuff. My goal is to help us all as writers. I try to sight positives more than negatives, so let me re-iterate that this story was, like, 99% positive.
I think in a longer piece there are no problems with the details. I think even on a short piece, details depend on the pace. In this instance, I just felt the details disrupted the pace. (there also was sort of the feeling that Sabbath was running through an entire catalog of pirate weapons, which leaves me wondering what he does for the next tale [;)] )
p.s. - really enjoyed "Ascension", too. I've posted my remarks over at the AJM forum.
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 |  MichaelEhart Sage

       Date Joined Jul 2005 Total Posts : 2314 | Posted 10/7/2005 8:13 AM (GMT -4) |   | I think you would be okay with the Kitchen sink--- From Sinkipedia: quote: The Kitchen-sink or kitchen sink is a multishot handheld sink, which was popular in North America around the time of the American Civil War. It was invented in the 1830s and was meant mainly for civilian use. It spread rapidly in the United Kingdom and some parts of continental Europe. It started disappearing gradually in the 1850s with the manufacture of true sinks by Colt, Webley and others. It can also be considered a primitive Gatling sink or machine sink of very small size and low rate of fire.
Several models were dangerous because pulling one drain stop could ignite the others, all at the same time, when proper care was not taken.
Now a Utility sink, or "double chambered sink" would be a problem, as these did not appear (IIRC) until the late 19th century, and then in limited quantities, so did not see common use until the beginning of WWI.
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 |  Bruce Durham Crom's Administrator & Drinking Buddy

       Date Joined Jan 2005 Total Posts : 605 | Posted 10/7/2005 12:25 PM (GMT -4) |   | Could have used a brass pot, though. A +5 brass pot for the D&D crowd.
I have to agree with everyone else. Great story. I enjoyed the action, and I had a clear vision of the characters. However, with all the calibres and shot sizes I thought I was reading 'Soldier of Fortune' at times. [:)]
But that's minor stuff in the long run. As a historical swashbuckling tale it was a standout, a throwback to the pulp years. I look forward to further adventures.
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 |  Supr Neophyte
        Date Joined Apr 2005 Total Posts : 107 | Posted 10/10/2005 1:41 AM (GMT -4) |   | | Excellent story, Nathan! I haven't read many swashbuckling stories but Sabbatinis Captain Blood and Stevenson. All I can say is: more action and blood in your story than in old masters pieces! | | Back to Top | | |
 |  baritsu6 Neophyte
        Date Joined Mar 2005 Total Posts : 122 | Posted 10/11/2005 3:14 PM (GMT -4) |   | nathan, i liked this yarn very much, being a pulp freak , i would describe as cross between howard and the type of stuff printed in spicy mystery stories . i enjoyed it very much and would like this continued or something of the like--regards, ralph
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 |  baritsu6 Neophyte
        Date Joined Mar 2005 Total Posts : 122 | Posted 10/11/2005 6:20 PM (GMT -4) |   | nathan, keep up the good work---everyone here has my support. i admire people with the guts to write, a talent i do not have---ralph
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 |  C.Cevasco Paradox Forum Moderator

       Date Joined Sep 2003 Total Posts : 939 | Posted 10/15/2005 8:09 AM (GMT -4) |   | Well, I finally found some time to start reading the new issue (which I've been wanting to do since its release), and I started with "Blood Meridian"--attracted to it by its historical setting. Great work Nathan! I was out of breath by the end of it--nonstop action while at the same time really evoking a sense of the time and place. As for the catalogue of weaponry, that didn't really bother me. There was a lot of it, and it came close to being overkill (no pun intended), but I thought it managed to dance close to that line without going over. As someone suggested on another thread (I think the main thread on the new issue), all of the details about the firearms almost made the arsenal of weapons feel like a character unto itself. Anyway, an enjoyable read!
Chris
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 |  baritsu6 Neophyte
        Date Joined Mar 2005 Total Posts : 122 | Posted 10/16/2005 5:13 AM (GMT -4) |   | nathan, i think you are ready for a good novel sized adventure----because you write well, have an open mind and you are not afraid of constructive critque---hocking and offutt, i expect top notch work from these guys EVERY TIME OUT, THEY HAVE THE KNACK but you my friend are a pleasant surprise !--ralph g
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