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Camille Alexa
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 7:56 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
It's a Reversing Count-down Pentato.  A Double Pentata?
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 7:52 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Howard von Darkmoor said...
So is this . . .

Sir Bird in park in
yon shade tree, pray
drop your bombs
not at
me

but
away.
Hitting cars
is fine, though please;
do try to miss mine...


. . . now a Diminuendo odneunimiD?

Hehehehe...
 
Echoendo?
Reflective Diminuendo?
Shift-gear Diminuetto?
 
 
I bet Jordan Lapp would call it Flash Fiction. [Hi, Jordan!]
 
 
 
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 7:01 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
So is this . . .

Sir Bird in park in
yon shade tree, pray
drop your bombs
not at
me

but
away.
Hitting cars
is fine, though please;
do try to miss mine...


. . . now a Diminuendo odneunimiD?

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 4:45 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Daniel said...
LOL, nice Camille!

Maybe modify line 1 to: "Sir Bird of Park in" to eliminate the extra "in" and extend the knightly metaphor.

I rather like the child-like sing-song of "Sir Bird in park in..."
 
But an earlier draft did carry the Monty Pythonesque knightly qualities further with a couple 'thines' & cetera.  Thought I'd spare us all, however.
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 3:39 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
LOL, nice Camille!

Maybe modify line 1 to: "Sir Bird of Park in" to eliminate the extra "in" and extend the knightly metaphor.

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 3:38 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
ROFL!!!

Never meddle in the affairs of a wizard unless you are soggy and hard to light!

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 3:35 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
 
 
Sir Bird in park in
yon shade tree, pray
drop your bombs
not at
me
 
but
away.
Hitting cars
is fine, though please;
do try to miss mine...
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 3:06 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
A bird deciding to take a dump on someone's car parked under a tree, now that would be part of nature, wouldn't it?

***

There's a punch line everyone can get!

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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Bitter Hermit said...
Isn't nature supposed to be the theme of the Diminuendo?


Yes it is, but humans are and the poem was about Daniel's personality, not his choice of business suit or his dining at a ritzy restaurant. So I can see that as qualifying.

Stuff like cars rolling down the freeway ... that's not part of nature.

A bird deciding to take a dump on someone's car parked under a tree, now that would be part of nature, wouldn't it?
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 1:07 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
I wish, since I apparently misconstrued the original intent of Daniel's post, he hadn't felt obligated to delete his words.

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To the contrary! Thank you for pointing out my faux pas --- humor is a challenge sometimes on discussion boards. Heck, I've been known to muff plenty of punch lines in the "real" world, as well.

Hoping for big laughs,
I typed a joke
online that
no-one
got.

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 12:55 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Am I not a part of nature?

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 10:20 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Isn't nature supposed to be the theme of the Diminuendo?

Exile of my own dull vice. . .

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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 2:11 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Howard von Darkmoor said...
Nice one, camille!

Likewise, Sir!
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  		   Posted 7/24/2007 1:06 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Nice one, camille!

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crystalwizard said...
Howard von Darkmoor said...
Daniel E. Blackston,
author poet
publisher,
silly?
No!
smilewinkgrin


Yes! You, Sir, are brilliant! :)

Yes, Sir von Darkmoor; CrystalWizard's right; very nice use of CrystalWizard's innovative poetry structure.  I wish, since I apparently misconstrued the original intent of Daniel's post, he hadn't felt obligated to delete his words.
 
 
Misunderstandings
perhaps arise
in face of
absent
posts.
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  		   Posted 7/23/2007 10:47 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Howard von Darkmoor said...
Daniel E. Blackston,
author poet
publisher,
silly?
No!
smilewinkgrin


Yes! You, Sir, are brilliant! :)

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Daniel E. Blackston,
author poet
publisher,
silly?
No!
smilewinkgrin

~~~~~~~~~~
Jason M. Waltz
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~~~~~~~~~~
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  		   Posted 7/23/2007 11:22 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Isn't this the kind of exclusionary, elitist talk that usually pervades rarified 'literary' circles regarding S&S, Sci-fi, and Fantasy in general?

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LOL, I was just trying to be "snooty" as a joke, really!
 
I went back and deleted my post, though, because I don't want people to think I am really trying to be exclusionary!!! Or naysay a new forum topic -- I think we should definitely have one on poetry.
 
Yipes! Sorry about that everyone; I was just trying to be silly.

 

 

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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  		   Posted 7/22/2007 10:39 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Daniel said...
[...] SF poetry for the most part is pretty dull and, from a technical PoV. doesn't offer much to discuss usually....
!?!?!
 
Uhm...that's...wow.  Uhm... a pretty subjective and rather sweeping statement.
 
I think more than one Forum member has expressed an interest in poetry beyond the merely 'technical'.  I like to think this wouldn't be a hostile place to discuss spec poetry just because certain members, in advance, find it 'for the most part' dull and not worthy of discussion.
 
Isn't this the kind of exclusionary, elitist talk that usually pervades rarified 'literary' circles regarding S&S, Sci-fi, and Fantasy in general?
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  		   Posted 7/22/2007 8:40 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Wasn't disagreeing Mike.

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  		   Posted 7/22/2007 7:58 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Why not?

There are so many markets for spec fic poetry that plenty of people write nothing but. And like spec fic short fiction, they have their own standards, troupes and foibles.

Mike

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Yes! Only spec fic sonnets allowed - no matter their subcategory!
lol rofl lol

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If we must, we must!
Lets us try to keep _some_ genre focus herein, though. (Says a man who just started writing (and selling) poetry).

Mike

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"Dutchman Rescue"in Continuum SF #6
www.continuumsciencefiction.com/orders.htm

"An Incident at Black Tongue Tavern" in _Bash Down the Door and Slice Open the Badguy_ from Fantasist Enterprises:
www.fantasistent.com/books/anthologies/BASH.php
www.fantasistent.com/books/anthologies/BASH.php
"Stains" in Tales of the Talisman 3-1 www.zianet.com/hadrosaur/index.html

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  		   Posted 7/21/2007 10:39 AM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
Daniel said...
And, hey, does the amount of interest here indicate there should be a "Poetry" category on the boards here?


I'd like to see that too. Who wants to talk Dave into it?
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  		   Posted 7/20/2007 4:51 PM (GMT -5)    Quote This PostAlert An Admin About This Post.
The weekend!?

That's not clacking, that's effort. :-0

I look forward to reading your post!

"Art is the celebration of the ego's destruction."

Daniel

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